Formorian War

I love the idea of the story and the setting. There are some problems with the script, a page is missing paragraphs, there is a passage repeating itself and the narrative feels rushed, lacking details (this is all in the first chapter, it is all i read for now, obviously will continue). But overall it is ok

The game is okay, has a lot of potential, but it needs a lot more polish, especially with the text. The text is hard to read, as most of the time it's all an incredibly long wall of text. It also has some spelling mistakes as well. The dialogue needs more polish. It's missing proper punctuation and capitalization, and reads more like a bad fanfiction. It has potential, but it's brought down by its lack of polish and its first draft syndrome. With more editing and polish, this story will shine.

I wish I could have given it a higher rating. However too many grammar, punctuation and spelling errors can make it a hard read for most. There were several times I made a selection, and then when reading the outcome of that selection, I found the narrative giving me the results of what I selected and another result right after, one that I did not select. I did enjoy the read